I don't know what else I could do besides practicing. What's the best way to improve my writing quickly?
In college, our creative writing professor told us to write detailed. Good writing is often specific and detailed, he said, and I think it's true for creative writing, journalistic writing, comedy, etc. "I woke up and poured a cup of coffee" is fine, but "It was 6:15, I went downstairs and got the French press ready," tells you so much more. Of course, this is just a quick tip and you can definitely overdo it, but it's one of my favorite writing "tricks."
Thanks for the clear example Kristin. Agreed that it makes it much more interesting.